They say I have a heart like an avalanche:
I have yet to find out what this means.
I laid in bed last night and thought about it.
Perhaps they mean:
My heart is pure and white
but heavy, and gaining fast.
Maybe it’s just my heart:
Is like a local baseball player
but that can’t be it.
It might not have been nice:
My heart is cold, frozen,
Easily irritated, smothering, deadly;
Something to avoid at all costs.
Or in that vein:
Naturally a disaster.
Maybe my heart:
Is more like a snowball;
Gathering hurts and loves close
building something larger than life.
I’ve thought about this long and hard:
It’s a difficult thought, difficult poem.
But even more difficult in full prose.
Thoughts can’t be fractured:
My heart is not one
but created from snowflakes.
Maybe my heart:
Is like a big-budget film
but that’s nonsense.
It could have been planned:
No metaphors were new,
They had to baffle, befuddle me;
Something to think hard about.
If that’s it:
Cleverly played trick.
Maybe, just maybe, my heart:
Was waiting on a mountain;
For someone brave enough or dumb enough
But loud enough to shout me down.
And that’s how I fall.














Comments
Sorry I've not much else to say.
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Anything particularly jazz or rag you about this one?
I like the new structure you've added, but the repetition of "maybe my heart" and its variants doesn't really do it for me -- they change too much, and that particular line is rather bland.
Otherwise, great.
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Whoa. I'm reading this and liking it a lot. I like the speculative approach, and how you expand so thoroughly on the idea and in so many different ways. Very cool.
Addressing the fact that the poem exists is nice, works for this subject.
The light injections of humor are great, the baseball and film bits. Adds some levity and diversity to the poem.
Wonderful ending. All of the ideas are swell, but that may be my favorite. Well phrased, too.
I like this a lot. Excellent work. A favorite.
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